Good job

I agree with the comet, but i think some kind of synthy strings would be very nice, maybe make major change in the song, sort of going to a chorus. Good job though

Please listen to one of my songs.

not bad for a first

Big thing here is to remaster it a bit, do some volume adjustments and try some compressors and soft clippers.

Drumline was pretty good, definately ragga style

Bass was pretty deep but just didn't seem vicious enough, maybe a synth playing with it in the midrange could help?

not bad though, I'd keep at it if I were you :)