I thought this was....

pretty amusing to say the least lol It'd fit so well into a gta san andreas music vid lmao
5/10 for effort and those sweet gun sounds... and the woman moan (+1 for just that!)
But you could do better I think

Man your fucking shit, lol some gangster you are

Man your fucking shit, lol some gangster you are it fucking sounds like 50 cent man your a waste of time.

Haha...

Yeah man, this is pretty funny stuff. The only thing I didn't like was that the vocals are at different volumes at different parts...I mean the vocals never remained at the same level, it was either too loud or too quiet. And you could tell you
did the vocals all at one time instead of peicing up the vocals, at different times instead of doing it all at one time. You will get a better sound if you do the vocals with more than one take, that way you can peice up the verses/chorus'/whatever to your liking and adjust the sound levels. You had a good idea going, but if you spent more time you could have gotten it to sound alot better. And don't say it's funnier with bad quality vocals
because it can still be funny when people can understand what you're sayin 100% of the time instead of 50% of the time. I know this because I have produced for Hip Hop before, in case you were
wondering...but yeah man. It's pretty cool though.
sorry if I didn't make any sense at times, I'm not a very good explainer of things.

....zzzz

U SUCK FAT NUTS UR WHITE PICE OF SHIT

Serious?

this is funny as shit especially the guy yellin its hilarious