While I think the ideas you mentioned would have made it sound cooler, I still think that as a standalone work of art, it's pretty neat. Not gonna lie, I have to say turning him into a candle DOES sound a little uninspired, but at least the execution of the piece is damn-near spotless. The grindhouse font is the slightest bit off, but I think you're being hard on yourself with it. It's really good in my opinion, along with the piece as a whole. What's not to love about that beard.