I like the look you are going for and the perspective but you need to practice more with a pencil and draw from images.
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Plus less of the thick black lines for detail - it just looks sloppy and should have added detail to under the wings and not just random lines thinking that will do.
Flames are not a terriable attempt but the lines need to be finer and less blured to give them that more spiky look, flames always move and get thinner upwards.