Its raw but, with a little work this will be tight
This is me being real cause I like the vibe.
1. Your vocals are really dry and to far in the front and there are some pitch problems
2. Rethink the beat and this needs a serious mix down and master
3. Do a few more double ups in the verse to make the song more full and add a break down.
On a good note the verse and chorus are great and I see what you where going for, this could be top 40 but like I say to all artist hone your craft cause you are still young and learning, you have great potential. I am not hating cause I don't review wack ish. You got my head bobbin so thats good the track is catchie please give this another mix down an get remastered. You got skill
Peace
Omega Phantom