nice. (rhino strings?)
you struggle in a similar aspect to me. Step layering. I would suggest you try this without metronome, or a significantly slower one. Just to humanize it a tad. Longer release, slower attack will give it a more natural feel between notes.
Composition wise it's a lovely tear jerker, it swells well and hits peak precisely where it should. The strings are strong but your support lacks expression in comparison, they are lost in the mix. So width would help massively.
You recording orchestral, mix orchestral. Think about panning, placement and verb.
5 btw always