ok...
i asume its better than your old stuff but its still not good enough for newgrounds if you ask me.
keep it up!
wuddever...
PS. make em longer
Reviews for "Stickafigure Air Show"
dr00pa responds:
Im trying to make them longer.... tahnks for pointing it out.
Hmm.. your getting better.
This is better than your last submission "Thank Mr Smiley" in almost all areas, but there are a few areas that need attention.
Graphics: One of the worst things about this is the time spent on the graphics, and it is one of the reasons that your submissions never really become "L33T". First up, you should add some textures to 'solid' objects, like the planes that come flying by in the beginning, cuz right now they look like polygons with colours flying out the back. And maybe try using more 'perspectives' in each of the various scenes. 4/10
Sound: That last guy was an asshole, just because your 12, it don't mean you shouldn't use voice in your submissions. Most commercial sound packages allow you to deepen the sounds played. Maybe you could try that, so as to make it sound more 'professional' and to make it just a bit more realistic. But it wasn't so bad, and having voice is preferable to using text anywayz. 4/10
Interactivity: It had a preloader and start button. Woopie. 1/10
Style: None. 0/10
Violence: Again, you have overdone your ratings, this is still 'Mild Violence'. If you want to see 'Excessive Violence' view one of Ryan Khatams submissions, or the Joe Zombie series. They are all stick animations and they are worthy of the 'Excessive Violence' tag. But there is still violence in here, even if it is a tad unrealistic(I.E: falling into a pit of spikes, wtfs up ith that?). 4/10
Humor: Fairly funny, but not any classic jokes that will keep you lauging days later. 5/10
Overall: It was an enjoyable cartoon, let down by some awful looking planes and stupid deaths.
You have some potential to be a nifty little Flasher, but with a fair bit of practice. 5/10
Peace Out.
dr00pa responds:
thanx, ill work on it, thank you for the txture tip
Needs Work.
Well, I'm not going to totally whale on this movie, because it was okay. The whole stick-figure art, choppy animation style is a bit overused nowadays. You could use better voice quality. Don't speak so close to your microphone; you're muffling your sound rather than making it louder. And lengthen the airshow itself to more than just two events.
dr00pa responds:
ya on my upcoming movie I am removing the sticks and making real ppl, and I should get a better mic.
Ok, here's some constructive critisism for you
Take your microphone, break it in half, and for the love of our poor ears, throw it the fuck away until your voice drops. I won't hold it against you that you're a 'late bloomer' but geez the sound was fucked up it hurt like a bitch!!
The humor could be better too cause it was funny about......0 times
This movie completely sucked if you really wanna know, but hey, maybe it's just me...
...no no wait, it isn't
Also, do you think you're azn or somethin?? "Enjoi"?? You sound like this gay (literally) azn kid I know that's a gayass satanist. But, I'm sure you'll take that as a compliment. That's a good reason for anyone to BLAM THIS PIECE OF CRAP!
By the way, I changed my mind, I WILL hold it against you that you're a pre-puberty assmunch that tries to roll with the big boys by using such grown-up words and numbers like 69....oooo you're a mature man now, son.
dr00pa responds:
Gawd im only 12 years old give me a god damn break. I am no "late bloomer" so shut the fuck up.
A nine year old shouldnt be saying those things.
Those were naughty words for some one your age. Shame on you.
dr00pa responds:
Im only 12 years old. Gawd give me a fuckin break you asshole motherfucker.