Could be better...
the animation was alright..but I couldn't tell if the main character was a boy or a girl, and the sound should be better...it's an alright job
Reviews for "Crimson Moon Ep 1"
Danthi responds:
I have been getting that allot, I don't know if it is because of the baggy cloths The hunter was wearing or because Females can't be deciphered between a Male, but it all depends on who you thought was the main character, the Vampire Ky whose eyes you never see, but in vampire form or the hunter who is a female. Ky is the Main Character of Crimson Moon and the Hunter is the secondary main character. Yes the sound will be better if all I had wasn’t a mini-tape-recorded and a crapy mic and sound recorder for a sound editing program.
Thanks
Jason "Danthi" Whalley
it was pretty good
I mean it was ok but for your effort I will give you an overall 6
Danthi responds:
Thanks I appreciate it.
Jason "Danthi" Whalley
Not very good...
You obviously put a lot of work into this and its something you clearly enjoy creating.
But you really dont have a strong grasp of a number of important things. The most obvious is ilustration, specifically anatomy. Anime is a poor drawing style to emulate, for reasons I wont get into here. I'm pretty sure if you stop imitating anime the quality of your work will improve damatically. I also strongly recommend taking a few illustration and anatomy courses.
If you were 13 I wouldnt it wouldnt be a problem. But you're 21, and you claim to be semi-professional. Also, you're obviously serious about your work.
The second problem is your flash. The most obvious problem is sound. The sound quality is pretty bad. I can't guess where the problem may be, but I recommend getting a good microphone and perhaps some sound editing software.
Your animation has a few positive points here and there. And your story has potential. But its going to take a lot of work to bring it out.
Danthi responds:
Ok so I am no as professional as I thought. I am only .000000000000001 professional right now. There goes my delusion of grandeur. I know that it is not very good right now and I need more work on it. This is supposed to be an Anime style movie. And it's as much a part of me as my hand I draw with. This is something that I hope to be doing as a profession someday but I do need a lot of work to make that happen. I have always had a problem with anatomy I am planning to go to an art school, or go to the collage here for an art course. My sound will improve. I am glade that there are some positive points to my animation, but that two will get better with practice I plan to do more frame by frame in this and my other ones. I am very serious about my work and making something good, not only good but something excellent in flash and same with my comics. Because they suck too.
Jason "Danthi" Whalley
Hm
This needs a lot of work. The style is sort of a failed attempt at anime, and the overuse of obscenities makes it cheap. The effort is apparent, and that's respectable...but you need to learn a lot more about anatomy and drawing in general. Nonetheless, it was a decent effort.
Danthi responds:
Yes this move dose need allot of work. The overuse of obscenities is to make a point, that Ky hate Tray, and Ky has been through allot in his life from become a vampire and having to kill one of his "friends" in a blood match, I can tone down the obscenities thought. But this is an animation for adults. My anime is not very good I admit mostly because I haven't been drawing anime most of my life only about 2 or 3 years at the max, I still have allot to learn about anime and it's style. Also my style is in there with the anime style. I have not taken any courses on drawing only through the school system, and not through college, but I do plan to. I thank you for your review.
Jason "Danthi" Whalley
Excellent for the first try
The sound quality is kind of bad, and what was going on with that vampire hunter's crotch in the first scene?
Otherwise, it was good.
Danthi responds:
Since I don’t have a sound editing program my sounds do suck. The thing with the hunter’s crotch is a failed attempt at frame by frame animation. This animation has allot of problems, and I thank you for your review I love the feed back from the users of Newgrounds, there don't know me so they are not going to hold any thing back which is a good thing. Thanks once again I hope you watch Crimson Moon #2 once I finish cleaning up the art and animation of this one.
Jason "Danthi" Whalley