good one
you know, when it started I thought: this could be put in a ratchet and clank game, it really sounded like that. however I don't think that anymore but if you just make it sound a little less rough it could still be used. little chance tho, that insomniac games is about to go through the entire NG audio portal to end up with your track.
overall this is quite a good one, keep going on like this!