Well, there may be too much time used/wasted on this single act, but overall not bad because it does build up some tension nevertheless.
Reviews for "The First Story"
Awsome!
nice backround, good use of sound, but madness is beyond jumpscares Lol
huh i forgot its madness day silly me
I agree with the others. You had an interesting concept, but the ending was very predictable and generic. I really liked the absence of music and the slow build-up. You also lacked a proper setup. Like, what is this building? Why does the MC come back there when there's ghosts? Why is he there in the first place? I know it's a madness movie, but some setup is needed. Also, I thought the "Day 2" thing sounded very generic and found footagey. Plus, what is it Day 2 of? He's not living in the building, right? Besides, you didn't give us a "Day 1" sign. The monster at the end and the end itself with the blood and screaming was super generic and didn't fit the tone. The animation was good, though.
You really seemed to be going somewhere with this one, but you lacked setup and gave into cliches too much. Definitely keep it up and kee experimenting, but be wary of those cliches.
Ghost-Kewell responds:
Thanks for your sincere suggestions,I'll keep them in mind and practice more.