This has got to be one of the most unique pieces I've ever heard in an AIM contest. This is pretty awesome. In a way this makes me think Techno with a hint of Trap. I feel it could use more bass with a synth, like something to rock the subs. That's really all I feel is missing but this is pretty awesome.
I love the way you experiment with music. I remember seeing Jazlyte at Pico Day, whooped me in MvC 2. He's a swell guy. This definitely fits the image. Seeing that image and what you described, kinda crazy to see how much work you put into this. Would be interesting to see a remix of this in the future (of course not in the contest but, just in general).
Personally I would have added some reverb to that synth in the left channel a little bit to give it a bit more depth but not much so it doesn't crowd the mix. I could see someone rapping over this. Anyhow, great job. This is a pretty awesome piece, I wish I could do something like this.