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I have to say I did like the game but there are things that I would like you to review:
First, Why did you decide to bring animation to the game? It is definitely an interesting idea but while lovely the cutscenes don't bring much to the story.
Second, there aren't many things to do. This may not be a problem: some of my favourite games are extremely simple but you will have to work on other things and if I were you, I would work on the dialogues and comments. Everything the player knows in this game go through dialogue, so make them more humorous / intriguing.
Some other things:
- I guess you are working on the laggy stages.
- Make the dialogue of the hatchet only appear once.
- Nice sound effects but the music is sometimes dissonant with the game (too calmed sometimes?).
- The music is great but sometimes it doesn't fit well with the rest of the game.
- The character is maybe sometimes too expressive. Its cartoonish stryle creates a dissonance between the eerie atmosphere of the stages and the main character.
Well to summarize it up, you need to work on the harmony of the game, and I would say that the origin of the "dissonance" I am talking about is the main plot of the game. You have good raw material, spend some time planing how to play with the elements and I am sure you can bring us a really good game.
the animation is very fluid and has good bounce to it, but not a great deal actually happens.
the narrative is nearly nonexistent, at least that i've seen, considering I only got the bad end. which brings me to my next few points.
The gameplay is /terrible/. Truly, truly awful. reading things doesn't give you any further information, it's pretty much a straight shot for the first part of the game, and the second part of the game is a collect a thon. Yume Nikki is quite possibly the only gamemaker game i've ever seen that did collecting the things in a fun and interesting way, and that was only because of the unique soundtrack, gorgeous landscape, and bizarre inhabitants, which transitions to my next point:
The overworld is /hideous/. I'm not an artist, so I can't really describe why, but the color palate and design just dragged on and on and on.
The soundtrack is /passable/. It isn't amazing, but it isn't awful. It's very simplistic, so I can't really get engaged with it, and it actually began to grate towards the end.
The game is also extremely laggy, which is horrid, and takes forever to transition from screen to screen. Given that this is a gamemaker game, that's pretty much inexcusable.
I did notice that you gave Lemon unique lines for every examine, which was nice, but the lines themselves weren't particularly notable. Just because it's a kid saying the lines, doesn't mean you have to write it like a kid's saying them. More advanced humor is fine, given that this isn't really a serious game.
A final complaint: every single time you cut something down with the hatchet, and every single time you pick up a piece of metal, your character says the same. freaking. lines. THAT is why I could not complete the good ending.
tl;dr, your game needed more in depth gameplay and storyline, more sprites in the overworld, and fixing whatever the heck could make an RPG maker game lag. The animation is really the only saving grace, but lacks the storytelling potential and good character design that would it would take to make this truly good. Currently, it's sitting at mediocre, but I am a very picky person.
Wow. What a cute little game you have here. A nice little cartoonish experience made in RPG maker, than can keep you busy and relaxed for about 30 minutes. The game feels a bit childish, but it can be approached by more adult audiences too. The cut-scene animations were pretty cool and gave the game a bit of originality, over the dozen of RPG maker games out there. The music was pretty good and it fit the atmosphere for the most part. The game runs rather intuitively but there are a few problems. Apart from the fact that it doesn't work on a few browsers, it also seems to get a bit laggy in the second part of the game. A few additions like a skip cutscene button, and some achievements could've made it reach a 5/5 review. I did make a let's play of it right here: https://youtu.be/XiexZtFqVoA . Hopefully it helps you with your educational experience. It was still a decent game, and I liked the puzzle that unlocked the second ending(although you needed a bit of memory to grasp it). A nice experience, and hopefully better ones to come.
Watching your Lets Play now, sorry about the frame rate issues, this being a port from an executable version that runs native at 720p its performance as a browser based game certainly seems to vary a lot from system to system. I don't think I will be making ports for Newgrounds for future game projects unless they are smaller than this one in terms of level design as I feel a lot of the issues are from the size of the maps. Glad you had a good time despite the issues with the game. :)
Damn that was a harsh ending. This game is awesome, I'm glad i checked it out!