Reviews for Final

[ValterValyun]

Since you said this is a class project, I'll my pointers to you so you can improve when the next time you animate.

Overall, the animation is really great, and I like the simple story you put in there (The guy having a hard time opening the can with a regular opener and then uses an electric, auto-opener).

However, there were some shots in this scene that are a bit rushed, probably after 00:10. You have some shots that depicts the guy's emotion; just linger that shot just about maybe a second or two longer so that the audience can know what he's feeling (anger, surprised, etc.)

Then again, the video is at 20 seconds so I have a feeling your teacher or professor's limiting on your time on the project, which is understandable. You don't have to stop there if you wanna continue adding on.

For the walk (this is more of a technical standpoint), watch out for your swinging arms. The swinging distance is fine, but it's just evenly-spaced. Add ease-in's and out's so the walk looks more natural.

Hope my advice helps you a bit.

jlboocker responds:

It helps a lot, thanks. I was limited on the time of the animation and the amount of time to work on it. If I had more time, I wouldn't have done everything in Flash and done it on paper. For the walk, I just did a quick cycle and repeated it, and I feel bad because it wasn't my greatest walk. There are some things I wish I would have noticed before hand, but overall I'm happy with it. Thanks again.

[JJMAJR]

Sorry, I have to give this a 2. Even though it is a final for your animation class you could have gotten some kind of purpose behind it. This is the equivalent of a rushed project.

You could have cut out the blood tears, they don't make sense. If you titled this video more appropriately or had the original concept be more closely tied to the video people would know what to expect from it, and I would have rated it higher.

jlboocker responds:

It's my first animation, and there are a lot of things I could have done differently. I was rushed, because I only had a week to do it, and I am also a single father with a full time job. The "blood tears" are supposed to be him getting angry, but I didn't know how to properly show him turning red. As far as the title, I honestly didn't think about it. To be honest, I'm surprised anyone rated this, let alone seven or eight others. I appreciate any and all feedback, so don't be sorry. I really do appreciate it. Thanks for taking the time to view and comment.