I liked it. Overall, I like that you really push yourself in these NATA things to experiment. I think that's the real value of this sort of competition. Its less about being the champion of all animators in the universe or whatever, its just to really test yourself and try new things with the added pressure of a brutal deadline.
As for this particular piece. I found the animation conservative. Dont know if its because the change in style or not, but I kind of like the crudeness of your earlier work. I think it feels more honest and 'human'. Which is hypocritical considering i just said how much i like the experimentation, but yea! The characters felt stiff sometimes. They were animated well, they just didnt have as much personality as I'm used to.
You have some pretty shots in there though. Pulling away to goto work. That whole bus scene with the birds disappearing and stuff. Really smart, well thoughtout shots. Good work!
Oh I kinda felt that you didnt need dialogue at all in it. It feels strange when it makes its appearance late in the movie. I think as a viewer youre already well aware of whats going on that the whole relationship with his boss, the paperwork and that conversation feels unnecessary. You already expressed the passing of time and the paperwork disappearing visually just fine. The whole no dialogue as he leaves home and as he runs into his kid again has alot of power behind it, i think the whole conversation bit slugs it up.