Again, this could have been made better by the application of subtitles.
I think that the plot exposition of this piece is a little weak. There are areas where additional asides could be used, more gratuitous violence, before PatriotClock gets in there and puts a stop to all of the fun and games going on , with the wanton destruction of Clocktopia. People could be fleeing for their lives at the very wrath of BiliardBall10Clock, at his master and former mayor's instruction.
There is a good deal of a skeleton here, as far as the plot is concerned, though I'd encourage you to add more to it. Why was HamburgerClock sacked from being mayor? Granted, this is Clocktopia and you wouldn't need that much of an excuse, if you wanted to remove him, but that's just one idea of how to flesh it out.
The dancing at the end was annoying, so I guess you did that right, knowing you guys. Perhaps if the plot were better, this sort of thing would be more tolerable? I'd personally like to see more in the way of drawing style, rather than just cut outs and photoshop style imagery, but hey, everyone's a critic.
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