I really didn't enjoy the chords, they were very common and also there is a number of nasty clashes especially from 52s onwards.
Putting that aside though...
The progression of this piece is very unique, very experimental which I enjoyed.
The timing is literally all over the place, everything seems to be out of time but in a weird way I really enjoyed that element of it.
You have a nice ear for melodies but I think you need to practice more on making coherent melodies that are in time.
Gonna keep a eye on your next few pieces, I want to see how you improve from this.