Well, I figiured if I've the other two stories on here I might as well review this one. The art's about the same as I expect from you, and I do like it, buuuuut I've never had a head for art really, I'm more of a story gal myself.
That said, there's not enough of the story for me to make a proper judgement, though I am curious about it, and it is a preview, so it's not like I would get much from it at this stage anyway. Honestly, this kind of 'crime syndicate' or whatever genre isn't exactly the type of thing I'm interested in, but I'm looking forward to it since you've proven you can pull a good amount of satisfying plot twists. So, I'd watch the finished product because I trust your story telling skill.
As for audio, I like the music, though it's good backround noise like the last two, so, it really doesn't stand out, but it does it's job. ...as for the voices...eh...heh....heheh..ew. Eeeeeeeew, ewewew, i'm sorry, I just...urk....sound sensitive...teh whispering...it's...I've heard worse voice acting...but...gah. Needless to say I'm really, REALLY not a fan of the voices. >.< The whispering to be honest just makes everything worse. It's like you were right up against the mike and spat into it wth every other word, and guh...
Well, really, like I'd said I'd watch the finished product...and I figiured you deserved an honest review...though...yeah, voices. Heh. But the rest looks good! Can't wait for the compleated thing!