It showed promise, and really could have been something spectacular, but it wasn't, and for a few solid reasons.
First and foremost, you really should have a pre-loader for any video you do. It may not seem important, but a pre-loader gives the watcher a feeling that the flash is competent, at least until they press play and watch it.
On that note, it wasn't really all that fluent. I won't bash you too badly on the fluency though, as you seem to be a new flasher, but work on that for your next flash.
Finally, you need to work on some kind of official end screen, with a replay button and not have it loop. A looping video gives off the appearance of unprofessionalism. You had credits, which is a start, but the looping killed it for me. Again, I know it seems unnecessary, but with a proper end screen will help the flash in the long run.
Ending on that note, if this was one of your first, then I am impressed. You'll end up becoming a much better flasher in a years time.