I liked your song, I can Imagine how it would come if you had a better Synth.
I also liked the lyrics and that wicked effect you used on your voice, though I think that you could do better on the singing, there were parts where you could be a bit more energetic you know? like.. if you where feeling really hurt by recalling the pain of the moment on certain parts of the song.
Anyway, overall, it's a nice song. Keep it up!