overall good but
the one thing i love about that story is the fact that he loved his wife so much that he actually would have done anything for her. like after she cut his hair he woke up and she apologized and he told her everything was ok and not to worry she didnt do anything wrong and he still loved her. on here it was put out there like she was some random whore who convinced him over a good b/j lol
then the last bit about the pillers thing was like it was put out there like everyone laughin at him and when he went over to the pillers everyone just thought he was just cowering away then he pwned them all .
this was all my p.o.v. but still good work and hope to see others :)