Microsoft Sam?!
To get it out of the way - and to avoid wasting time talking about it - I'm going to have to agree with just about everyone who has reviewed this flash, and say that the voice needs to be slowed down, or even made human so it's more easily understandable. That voice is Microsoft Sam, from the whole control panel > sound thing, right? While it sounds funny when played fast, there isn't a great deal of clarity, meaning that its kind of hard to follow the story.
As for the story itself...well, all I know is that he played Gamecube, was tranquilized by mario, went to target, and finally got his ice cream after an ordeal with evil cats and an octopus. While I can respect totally random things, I do feel that the plot is a bit off. You could probably get away with such if people could tell what was going on.
The graphics aren't entirely great, but with the style you're going for, they work. If anything's laughable in the flash it is the graphics, which give the idea that its some kid really telling a story about how he broke his leg. My only true graphical problem is the written text, which was, at times, difficult to read. I would recommend either making it neater (its flare is obviously in the messiness/hand-drawn quality that it has) or switching to some crazy looking font that you could edit to look hand done. The first option is probably much easier.
Like others have said, a pre-loader and replay button would be very nice, but I would also recommend including credits, just to give it that professional shine. Yes, I just made that up. All in all, it's not bad, it just needs some polishing.
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