Frikken awesome.
That was fan fuckin tastic dude.
I love how ya used the Aliens for the baddies, that made my day.
Music was good, but if you could just keep it off that loop or include some different music in there, twould make it better.
Reviews for "TNAO:- The Beast P1"
Nice
Your art/animation style looks extremely promising, now it's all a matter of tightening it up until it's perfect. Very good work for your first flash submission.
The inclusion of the alien character was a nice surprise, although its actual drawing/animation was one of the weak points of the flash. It also seemed like you should have given more credit to the Alien franchise for borrowing their characters, maybe even include the word 'Alien' somewhere in the title (visibly including the TM/copyright symbol. The suspenseful buildup to the big reveal was top-notch, however.
It's too bad the audio wasn't anywhere near as good as your artistic presentation. The fact that the old man didn't have any audio actually seemed pretty forgivable after hearing the heroine's poor delivery; the use of professional voice actors would definitely help here. And you should honestly consider hiring yourself some writers or something, every line of dialogue was an overused action movie cliché. Finally, as pretty much everyone has already mentioned, work on your grammar; nothing lessens the credibility of a 'serious' flash like an abundance of grammatical errors.
All that being said however, this was a solid first effort and a sign of better things to come. If you hire some professional voice actors, tighten up the animation and work on the writing, you might just have a winner on your hands here.
meetxj9 responds:
Thnaks for the tips, i do intend to get pros to do the voice acting. But not at the moment cause i am currently busy with other subjects. I want to get better at editing also, introduce some usefull sites to me if possible.
I did intend to put the Alien title up, but to respect the franchise and not overuse the word to get ratings i decided not to put it up as a title.
lol
Well
Mostly, the animation is very nice. Atlhough the side-scroll walking animations still seem a little unnatural, the rest of the more complex animation in fact, is smooth and subtle. (Gross as it is, I thought the ear-dropping was done very well)
However, I DO have a problem with the blatant use of an Alien 'alien'. As hard as it can be to design your own monster, it's far worse to use such an iconic one IMO. ESPECIALLY, if you're going to go commercial with it (as I saw the book).
meetxj9 responds:
My first and second flash is actually for pratice. The original stuff comes after the 2nd flash. Plus, who wouln't want to animate a xenomorph.lol
It was good...but...
Please for the sake of your flash find voices for all the parts! Someone on newgrounds in the forum would probably be happy to help if you ask = )
This was great work though.
meetxj9 responds:
If you know any body that might want to fill the part of the oldman, i will be happy to take them in for tryouts.
cheers.
It's good but...
You need to work on a few things. For example, you should probably get someone to do the old man's voice (Yeah, you've probably heard that one a thousand times or so) and you should watch your grammar, especially on these 'serious' flashes. I noticed you accidently put down 'u' instead of 'you' in the old mans lines when you see the first man dead so just be careful with that.
Animation is very nice and clean but at some points it's a little jerky but that's to be expected on your first animation. Other than that, nice job for your first animation and keep up the good work. I'll be hunting down that comic book to see what happens next!
meetxj9 responds:
Thanks,
The book is a whole new diffenrent story, i finished the book while i was still in college. However if you visit my DEV you will see some samples of issue 1 and 2. The art differance from both of them is quite big.