This was a very original style and I liked it. I feel that it has more
potential. I've read a review that it could use some color and I agree completely. Also, some shots could use some more background. It just seemed like it was blank. There were some pretty funny parts in this cartoon. The best part was YOU JUST HAVE TO REALLY SQUEEZE!!!!. Humorous idea about having a normal person as a super hero but it was over played when you said ordinary for the what it felt like the billionth time. I think the script could have been written longer, with more funny parts where he says something that you hear all the time except in his hero voice, and try not to use the same words. The theme was amazing but where was it during the cartoon? Music would have added to it a lot, especially some during the running scene to build excitement and then he stops to take a breath. I would like to see another one with the things I've said in it. I'm also interested in how long it took you.
How long this took me? Well, just about two months actually. My other cartoon though "The Origin of the Hair" took 7 months. This one was short, but it was as long as it had to be really, I don't feel there was anything else that could have been added. As for the theme, I feel that having it play during the cartoon would ruin the flow. Some will agree, some will disagree, that's why I have to do whatever I feel is best, as you can't satisfy everyone's taste. The theme was very awesome though, you should hear the whole thing. As for the backrounds, yes, I wish there were some backgrounds, but if you had any idea how I do this cartoon, you would agree that it would be close to impossible, at least without a camera. Since this is all done tracing by hand, adding a backround would mean tracing and re-tracing that same backround 50-60 times, which would be insane, so as much as I'd like to have one, I'm afraid I just can't do it now, until I have some money for a program (in that case, I will still be animating everything by hand, I'll just be using it for things such as adding backrounds and coloring). Now for the color, it's a pain, because I have to color every frame by hand, which adds a lot of time to the process (My last cartoon was colored, and frankly, it just wasn't worth it for this). Also, I have received a lot of positive feedback based on the black and white, so I feel that I should stick with a formula that works. If and when I get a program, I might reconsider. Now for the repitition of Ordinary Man, you're right. I didn't really notice it until I started doing the voices, and well, that's a goof up on my part. Hopefully the dialogue will be more to your satisfaction. Lastly, I have just started episode 2, which is off to a very slow, but good start. It won't be out for a loooong time, because it is longer I think, and it's going to be better (as in more complex animation, but don't get your hopes too high, it probably won't look much better then this one). So, anyway, keep a look out for the next one, and I appologize for the length of this response, as I have never written one this long before (I don't think). However, you made a lot of good comments, and well, a good review deserves a good response I think, right? Anyway, thanks for the review and for the comments.
Best one yet! That is exactly what I have hoped to hear. Although I'll never feel as satisfied as I did with the hair, I certainly hoped that this one would look better. Thanks for the review, and glad to see you're a fan of my work! Stay tuned for Episode 2, because if this is my best yet, than you will certainly enjoy the second episode. Once again, thanks for the review.
The graphics weren't so great? Do you mean because it was pixelated, because if that is the case, then that is because I do this on paper, and then videotape the drawings, and when you convert recorded video (such as claymation) into flash format, it tends to make the video quality worse. I'm sure that's what you mean, so I'm not going to take it the wrong way, but if you're implying that it was poorly drawn, then I am extremely offended by that. I am glad that you thought it was funny.
the animation flowed great, and the drawings on the guy's hand was great also. The movie was hahaa funny, but the end joke left me with a hahh/hehh so that brought the movie down a little. Still good and 3/5's, and i'll be awaiting the next cartoon or ordinary man. An Alternate Ending? "Oh no! Woe is me there's no mustard."
Thank you for your review. The thing about the end joke was that, it wasn't much of a joke really, I know it looks like it was intended to be funny, but really, it was just a way to end it. Also, at the time, I was thinking that the cartoon would be longer, so by the end his burger would have been cold, so I figured I should make that clear. I totally agree, it's not that funny, I just did it the way I did it, because, well, it had to be silly to match the overall feel of the cartoon. Glad you liked it, and as long as the animation itself is appreciated, I'm happy.
