Not bad for a first submission
It wasn't that bad for your first submission. Good idea, decent graphics and nice theme music.
But as always, there are things it could improve with. The sound for instance was kind of choppy and the music made the voices sound distant and hard to hear. If it weren't for the subtitles I wouldn't of been able to make it all out. There are various way to tackle this though. For one, you could make the music quiter and the voices louder and clearer. But a better way would be to, once it's finished, edit the sound file at certain points so that when the speaking parts come up, the music fades and the voices can be heard better. This also gives it a cool effect. The dialogue and voice acting could of been better too. Particulary that line: "I - I must finish the mission" was kind of corny and poorly said. Put more thought into your dialogue and more feeling into the lines when you say them. If you're going to voice act in future submissions I suggest you work on this. The animation needs some working on too. But I think it's just something that gets better with practice.
I was quite impressed, pretty good for a first submission. Work on these areas and you'll be getting awards in no time.
I gave it an overall 6.