great
nice to see other Spartans getting some glory.
Reviews for "HALO: The Other Spartans"
good but...
That was pretty cool but man there names are tom and rob...... And the line spartan's for ever i mean come on other than that it was cool you can tell alot of time when in to it good job.
GREAT!
Nice one, very well drawn and made. The story is great, too. If you're going to make a series out of this, count on my vote!
Just one thing, though: you should improve a bit the sound, because I've found difficult to understand the voices without the subtitles...great job anyway!
Not bad for a first submission
It wasn't that bad for your first submission. Good idea, decent graphics and nice theme music.
But as always, there are things it could improve with. The sound for instance was kind of choppy and the music made the voices sound distant and hard to hear. If it weren't for the subtitles I wouldn't of been able to make it all out. There are various way to tackle this though. For one, you could make the music quiter and the voices louder and clearer. But a better way would be to, once it's finished, edit the sound file at certain points so that when the speaking parts come up, the music fades and the voices can be heard better. This also gives it a cool effect. The dialogue and voice acting could of been better too. Particulary that line: "I - I must finish the mission" was kind of corny and poorly said. Put more thought into your dialogue and more feeling into the lines when you say them. If you're going to voice act in future submissions I suggest you work on this. The animation needs some working on too. But I think it's just something that gets better with practice.
I was quite impressed, pretty good for a first submission. Work on these areas and you'll be getting awards in no time.
I gave it an overall 6.
lvl4l2C responds:
Thanks for the tips and suggestions! Yea, I'm not in drama or anything so...my acting isn't very good. I'll probably look for a voice actor next time. I know the sound wasn't the best quality :/ but ill look into that for my next flash. thanks for the comment
this cant be ur first
if this is ur first i cant wait to see ur second it was well drawn and animated the thing was the sound effects a few more and a bit longer u got a good animation good luck with other projects .nice one