The worst part is that it is'nt finnished!!
My favorit part was the pace and look of this effort. The only thing I can say is keep it up and you will be even more notice. You really have a talent, and thank you for sharing!
More erieness.....maby a twist that proves that these are all of her personal "ghosts in the closet" and that she recognizes them as her own...mabey the kid is akin to the rabbit in Alices world. Yhanks again
I was gonna try and link them to her somehow... it's coming to me slowly... Definitely going for a 'down the rabbit hole' thing in the finished one. something mind-bending if i can manage it. thanks!
Fascinating start
This is a wonderful submission with a lot of potential. You have the possible vampire motif with the master sleeping downstairs. The potential danger to the boy who disappears at the entrance connecting to the later screams. A variety of ghosts and stories that can come from them. And you have the heroine.
I see three possible directions from here.
Heroine: The bishop sends her to be servant but secretly hopes she has the power to clean up the mess. Exactly what powers she has is up to you.
Possession: She is possessed by the red lady who was the master's old paramour. The evil acts afterwards could be quite spooky. After she fights of or is released from the possession, the acts she performed could drive her to her own suicide and continuation in the house as just another ghost.
Anti-heroine: Possession, meeting the master, destroying the master and becoming the new "lady" of the house.
The boy could fit in as cowardly assistant, endagered victim, sacrifice that motivates her to act, or actual victim (hers or the master's). I look forward to seeing where it goes.
I never know how to mark interactivity or humor on a submission like this so forgive the 0s, please. Overall I give it a 9 because it is incomplete but I think it will be a 10 when it is finished. The sound at this time has no dynamics since it is still in the buildup phase. Keep dynamics in mind and I think sound will go up too.
Excellent work.
You sir, are a god. Those are all wonderful suggestions. I won't tell you what my original idea was... but your observations will come in handy as i try to put the rest of it together. Thank you for taking the time to write it down.
not bad
this is alright
wow...
so intricate and detailed! I'd like to see more out of you soon.
Great look ...
It looks good, it's got a good style and the sound was good too.
I've got two questions though - why wasn't that girl afraid of anything? and what happened to the boy that was with her outside?
I'm not sure yet why she's not afraid. Mainly because I havent designed a scared face yet. Also I think it's creepier that she's not freaking out or anything. There is actually alot more of this story to do. More ghosts, more spooky sets and a giant escher stairwell. Some is finished... But I decided to focus only on the ghosts of the family in the picture for the Halloween Trailer. In the final movie I'm going to try to make it all fit together... but right now i just need to stop so I can party a little for halloween. :)