It was entertaining, and I liked the 'scruffy anime' style of drawing, but there are a few things that bothered me:
The dialogue is so quiet that without subtitles I wouldn't have understand half of it, and that's not even because the music was loud, it was just recorded badly.
The story made little sense to me. I understand bits of it, but I'm still scratching my head wondering what was just happening.
Was this supposed to be funny? There were clues that this was meant as a slightly humorous piece (the KFC product placement, the girl's slightly bored voice as she fights) but I didn't laugh at any of it. Maybe it wasn't meant to be, nevermind.
Some of the action sequences were too fast, it was near impossible to see who was moving where and such.
I liked the tools box with subtitles and skipping ahead features, I think all submissions should have that included!
Overall, I enjoyed!