good idea, bad grammar
I liked it, i really did. The only problem is you need some sort of voice, im sure u can find some1 on the BBS. also, have some1 proof read your script, cuz thats horrible grammar. if you want, i would do it for u.
otherwise its good, if u get voices, and fix the grammar then try resubmitting it.
god
this would have been allright had you had vocals. I understand you were telling a story and stuff, but that intro was so boring! I almost fell asleep. My advice to u, is next time add different focal lengths and cuts. Like cut to each character as there talking. This means that when your going through a long bit of dialog, it doesnt get all ZZZZ. You really should have done character voices, seriously. The animation was okay, but most of it was looped graphic symbols. You just need to speed it up.
Booooooring
Well, its boring, way too long per line. Plot introduced too far in. I can see some talent it your drawing so good job. Add VOICES! And if your going to make stuff in English use proper grammar. Its "if blah blah blah THEN blah blah blah"
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urm... right, you need a better timing for the frames people can read faster than you think so times. maybe a background sounds.... for the whole movie so not just wind blowing. and you need someone to help you with the plot and the conversation... some of it is really corny....
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Random Guy: You missed a Rubbish Film...