Sorry to say it brother...
It actually bummed me out, but this song didn't work for me. Now, it may catch the attention of others, and who am I to judge? To each his own. But the song starts off too heavy in the beginning. There isn't any warm up into it, and it doesn't cut back from their. It's too busy. Too much all at once, yes? Now, the beat is solid, and that kept it out of the one's...or the zeroes. But for how short it is, and how it dug itself right into my ears, I can't give it more than a three. Sorry bro, but I'd take this back in and rework it. It has potential, but your going to miss most of your audience with this...
Keep at it.