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Reviews for "fear - a poetic flash"

nice!

Hey I liked it (^-^)

thats a awesome poem, little weird but awesome kudos!

::see you space cowboy::

Wow

I cant believe the awsome graphic skills you have. That has to be the best thing in the damned world, and you used the world megalomania. I wanna touch you my little scootypuff.

Plz take notice, Great Poem

Great Poem, and a excellent choice of music. But you must improve your graphics. The rythem of the poem fit perfectly with the music which makes me think you wrote the words to go with it. You did a great job of sync you just have to get better with your drawings and graphics. They blue stick figure who was made of maybe 6 strokes from your mouse for one. Great Job i hope to see more from you and improved graphics with the same good style. Oh and don't worry about any emo crap you get, its just a fad to dis emo people at ng it seems.

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The graphics were bad, and in the name of construction critisizm:
You disobeyed the rules of poetry, first off, rhythm. You need to have a set amount of syllables in each phrase for it to sound right. The line I think I noticed that was "committing suicide". It should just be "suicide" only because there are a certain amount of syllables. Also, you can't go in and out of rhyme. For 1 or maybe 2 lines you rhymed, and then you got out of rhyme. If you do that, it sounds horrible and way too out of place. If you rewrite it and remade the flash to have better graphics and whatnot, it'd be better. So good luck for the next flash. Until then, keep it up.

Coiz responds:

Everything you just said is a lie. Poetry is the art of word play, and nothing more. I write poetry with rhyme, but this particular poem is written in free form. The rhythm in the poem can be found in the pattern with which certain lines were OUT of rhythm.

it was good but

it was good but kinda emo-ish and emo people are scary but im sure this will make it past jugement