It was not that good, but not that bad 4 a pg 3'er
call the cartoon "Luigi's Will"
first, leave out neo. Second, add bgm (background music), give the Mario Bros. hair, conect the mustach, I liked how you drew that castle, daisy wasn't well drawn, and use regular colors. Not bad for something on the third page. But, no wonder it was on the third page! REALY!
ps, use sprites instead. You have potential.