Sigh...
Check my review on J-Kellz "Headed for Hell" track for more help. You get a point for your attempt to be creative; however, I don't think the attempt is a real success. Understand the rules that govern true hip hop. Just like a dancer should do history of dancing; a dancer should know the history of "Westside Story." A singer should understand the history of Icons such as Michael Jackson. Baskellball players...Michael Jordan; boxing...Mike Tyson and Muhammad Ali. Hip hop/Rap....KRS-One, Rakim, MC Shan, LL Cool J, Big Daddy Kane, Kool J Rap, EPMD, Nas, BIG, Jay-Z, even Eminem to an extent. Again, if you don't understand my review, please read my review on J-Kellz "Headed for Hell" before you apply the negative (although I probably might get it anyway). :)
But stuff like this pisses me off.