i dig it
i love the vibe this song brings it is really a work of art.
a few pieces of personal criticism to take or leave
1. i dont agree with how constrained you kept the vocal part melodically you could branch out more.
2. more instrumental melody's could be kool
3. as is might provide too much repetition.
dont be offended by any of my advice. as i said i do truly love the song as is.