That was interesting, nice idea you have there. I know it can't be immediately done, but your graphics need some work, the backgrounds were all gray shade, and it fits the noir feeling of the flash. But there can still be a bunch of other stuff in there, little details.
And all-around the characters should look more serious, some more design put into them and voila.
I like this, I would like to read the book when it's done also.
And I guess it's supposed to be Glympse, but if it's supposed to be Glimpse, you got a little typo in there.
The part which said "in a room" and the kid bouncing around the screen didn't quite fit in the feeling of the whole flash, but hey, no-ones perfect but me. ;)
Bottom line: 'Twas swell.