Wickedly Intresting Intro for a book.
Don't be discouraged by the Nay Sayers. SamBakZa did a flash for his book Hotfish-Same but Different. Don't change the story for anyone..Keep true to the characters, and keep true to the story. Cliche means nothing if you put your heart into it.
The Intro was great. I'm not an animator, but from what I've watched, when dealing with music..a fade out creates more focus for the next sound effect or musical section. Anyway..
Go for it!