Funny
Not laugh-out-loud funny, but still pretty funny. This kind of reminds me of The Mattress Resprung in style and humor. You're actually a decent voice actor, which is more than can be said about most flash authors. To be honest, if this gets blammed, it's probably more because you said this was your first submission than anything else. Pity doesn't work on newgrounds; it's packed to the brim with pricks, so people see the word "first" and it registers as logical that the movie will get blammed, so you get a lot of unfair zeroes and ones.
You have a lot to work on, but you show serious potential.