Very good
Has extremly strong emotional impact on the listener, even now at midnight in physical exhaustion when the body is weak to emotional impulse I still felt every beat.
The lyrics looked sketchy written out but they sounded beautiful the way you sang them.
For the flash artist I belive this is FMV (Flash Music Video) worthy. Also here is an idea.
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0:00 - 0:10
Slow dynamic zoom in on a man about 15 or 16 years old sitting at the end of a dock, skies are dark, its not raining but it seems like its about to, its cold, slight wind blow, and its around twilight time (about 6pm) where everything appears to be in "Shades of Grey"
0:10 - 0:19
man looks at water, Fade in (man still sitting their with overlay of memory) to memory of girlfriend at same dock with them boarding a cruise ship.
0:20 - 0:25
Him and his girlfriend are embrassing and holding eachother in a very "Loving" atmosphere, flowers in the background, and even birds. quickly fade back in to him sitting at last second.
0:25 - 0:29
animation of before mentioned scene where he is sitting on dock.
0:29 - 0:35
him sneaking away from home at night to see her not getting cought.
0:35 - 0:39
he looks at water and see's her face for a moment as if she's there
0:39 - 0:45
red rose tied to the end of the dock, zoom in close to rose so its between the camera and the man, change focus to rose, then change back to man
0:46 - 0:58
Starts raining, man reveals a ribbon (any color) he was gripping in his hand that belonged to his girlfriend, its slightly torn and appears to be worn out. Quick flashes of his gf being forced against the wall by her ex, with 2 guys on either side.
vFor all chorusv
0:58 - 1:04
Man embracing his girlfriend, as she's crying with head against his chest. background of bricks, its dark.
1:04 - 1:08
Back to rose tied to dock but in a top-down perspective.
1:08 - 1:18
camera looks up at sky rain should be hitting lense but doesn't, then slowing turns to ocean.
1:18 - 1:27
Fade in on guy stopping her before getting on the boat with a "warning" like look in his eye, as if he knew what was gonna happen.
1:27 - 1:37
camera looks up at sky rain should be hitting lense but doesn't, then slowing turns to ocean.
^For all Chorus^
1:37 - 1:47
camera towards ocean waves heading to shore
1:47 - 1:57
split screen, On left shows the man before he met her sitting against a wall on the sidewalk in the ran no money, nothing to do, and no friends (doing badly)
on right shows girl finding her old boyfriend sleeping with her friend, freeze framed moment of shock.
1:57 - 2:06
Man thinking about a fight they had before she left on her trip, she slaps him.
2:06 - 2:16
Man standing over her ex boyfriend with a bloody knife dripping fresh (he rapped her)
Chorus
2:58 - end
Slow zoom out camera focused on rose, as you see where the dock meets the coast, cop cars arrive at the entrence with sirens, man drops ribbon and it floats away.
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I hope you enjoyed that "flash idea"
its by far the most discriptive I've written, and once again, thank you for such great music, and for being the first "pop" artist on newgrounds I ever liked.
