nice music...
pointless, but good.
Reviews for "Writing on you desk"
Loved It
Very unexpected and very good humor, I LOVED IT
AND a tiger too?
Ohh... That was soo funny! Ha HA!
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(btw, I'm NOT being sarcastic. I REALLY think that was funny! Keep it up!)
had potential, but...
I guess I feel like this had a ton of potential, and it just didn't pay off. Using the dangers of writing on one's desk is an excellent premise (great job!) and it had me very interested, and rooting for it from the start (again, great job!). Furthermore, your animation style was smooth and interesting, along with your use of color and pacing (great job yet again!). But after all those really positive things, we get "until you stab your eye."
I'm trying to figure out why you used that. I mean, I suppose it could be because you feel that most of the NG audience appreciates things that are just senselessly violent, or just pure physical comedy. But, that's not necessarily so. Even if we DO love that stuff, we can just go watch "Soft Outer Crust." Or, maybe you did the "stab/tiger" thing because you had so many good elements lined up, and you couldn't come up with anything better, but you still wanted to make and post the animation. If that was the case, I'd say you ought not jump so quickly, and spend more time on the script.
The obvious third reason was that you actually thought the "stab/tiger" thing would be really great. I don't believe that. You show too much skill here for me to believe you'd think such rote material is actually quality.
I predict we'll be seeing a lot of good things from you in the future, provided we don't have our eyes pierced with sharp objects over and over and over and over and over again.
wowHOWnow responds:
Thanks man, this was really good constructive criticism, it was encouraging. Just had to say thanks...
LOL
Now tell us of the potential hazards of sticking gum under the desk!