ok some pointers...
Good but needs some work. Is it my headphones or is the bass distorting? I hate to say this (being a trance fan), but you might want to take the bass down a little. Also consider changing the volume of some of the tracks, its hard to tell what is supposed to stand out sometimes. Especially those background strings, they were good in the begining but TURN THEM DOWN lol. Ok for the good parts. Very upbeat melody, I just heard a good bouncy bassline, use that some more. Overall original and could be a killer track if worked on more. I'm out.