That was realy random! And I'm a fan of random. But this was a different kind of Random! It had no realism nor was it that funny. It should be more funny unless you want to add seriouses to it which i don't think u want to do. if its random but not that funny (too me). You should spend atleast an extra day and check with your friends on whats funny and whats not. Hope I was some help. Cheers!