I want to see this seris be succesful
so, I've done my very first review. The action is down, the story seems to be there, the only thing that bugged me was the dialoge. Don't have Magus speak in ALL CAPS BECAUSE IT GETS ANNOYING AND DISTRACTING. See? If you want his text to be different, use a different font or something. I saw a few uncapitalized proper nouns and spelling errors. Spend time spell checking and making a decent story, and you've already got the action skills to make a top notch flash.