Nice!
Very nice! I still can't believe this is your first song! I did promise i would write a helpful review so here goes.
Tips:
1. Beat - Should maybe be a little louder so it doesn't get lost behind the guitars. This would give it a more complete feel.
2. Guitars - Maybe add some reveerb. (You may not know how to do that but i can teach you over msn)
Things to add: (These are tottaly up to you)
1. Bass guitar - This would add a nice effect
2. Extra instrument - Examples: Orchestra strings, high techno noise, pad.
I hope that helps!!!
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