i love it, this kind of music is really something i like to listen to
and you performed it quite nicely... but there are points it still can improve on
you have a great voice, even though its great and has a lot of feelings in the words, i still think you could sing some part that it fits the song better
"We're chasing the world on fire" (1.19) the way you sing "fire" in that part fits great, it gives a fantasy feeling to the words... wish you did that more!!!
and something that can be improved on the instruments is the string-like sound from 1.36
if you used some realistic sounding strings instead of the ones that are in it now then it would definitely give an epic feeling to the second part!!!
also the music doesn't reach its full potential in some other parts...
keep it up!!! you sure have talent...