I wasn't keen on this.
I felt the 3 verses were too similar in melody. And the basic melody, in my opinion, was a bit boring and uninteresting.
I felt your voice just wasn't 'powerful' enough to match the number of effects and whatnot that you have on those guitars.
I felt the lyrics seemed a bit meaningless - they may be meaningful to yourself, but I just didn't 'get' anything from them.
I felt the first few seconds of the instrumental part sounded cool, but I didn't like it when you added the retro square-wave-type synths.
I do like the instrument that comes in around 2:00 and then 2:35.
I commend you for messing about, mixing real/synth instruments and obviously a bunch of others enjoy this. I, personally don't.
Maybe you're best off catering to those who do enjoy your stuff.
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