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(WIP) Who broke it? - {lazy animatic of my OC's that only a few of my friends will get}

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Not bad, would do better if you ever polish it up.

im-thearkansas responds:

Yeah lol I plan on posting a colored and polish version really soon

Where did you get the audio from?

im-thearkansas responds:

Parks and Rec lol, if you search "Who broke it?" On YouTube that's how I found it

I notice that the designs are detailed and stand out. Also the voice actors did a phenomenal job on this. Dunno if it was intentional for the guy to sound like Ron Swanson but that's a cool addition. The second to last line sounded like something he would say.

However at 0:25 the line was delivered a bit fast. I get why but if you do it at a faster pace but it should be loud enough to understand still.
At 0:32, the line was still delivered too fast I heard something about stirs and cuticles but not the whole thing.
At 0:42 I know the line is a whisper but the same problem occurs: It's too quiet for the audience to hear the line.

Your audience needs to understand the joke so you should pause in between in order for the joke a sink in instead of going from point A to B so fast. It's too much information to process in one second.

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Nov 5, 2023
4:52 PM EST