I really like paradises dress and the general story. Greys demeanor and the strange absorption thing on the side. All around its a pretty good comic at the pilot stage

Paradise sure does look very cute in that dress! Also, the interactions between Grey and Paradise are fun to look at too! I mean, they sure do care for each other in a genuine way despite differences of their own. :D

Well that was.. Steamy, hoh,

Although all the important stuff is pretty straightforward, what had me intrigued is a lot of the stuff happening behind the scenes and with all the characters interactions. Which has me asking questions about whether Aliens are the new "Minority Ethnicity" or perhaps they are, or were, infiltrators causing trouble and/or fleeing it.

The ending has me pondering what Paradises deal is, is she a creature that's biologically driven to eat/absorb people? but chooses not too? I presume it'll be explained at a later time.

Overall, an intriguing read. the panel with the mirror reflection and how detailed it was had me quite impressed, I doubt I would of gone to such lengths in your shoes.

My only critique would be asking Harry about integrating a zoom function. While opening it on a new tab and using the browsers zoom works fine, its a bit of an inconvenience.

So that pink is her skin? I thought it was some sort o suit or something...

TLDR: Comic great, "game" presentation needs a lot of work.

As a comic, I'm not going to comment much on it. It's 18 pages long, quality artwork, decent story, the girl looks a little derpy, and one sex scene (no nudity thankfully). Maybe the colours + lighting look a bit flat, but that's about it.

However, "Paradise Slice 02: Read the Comic" (also Slice 01) is technically considered a "game", or rather, an interactive piece of software which centers around this comic, not too far off from most e-book readers, and from a technical perspective, it's incredibly barebones. You can click either side (or arrow keys) to flip pages, pop it out to another tab, and nothing else. No music or sound effects, no additional flair, nothing that oozes "creativity" aside from within those pages.

Here are some suggestions for improvement:
*** Try to add stuff from the author comments (descriptions, credits, links to other comics, etc) into the software itself.
Example: The instructions could be a single pop-up when you open the comic.
*** Visual indicators that only show up when you hover your mouse over one side (to indicate you should click to flip the next page.

** Display 2 pages like a real comic book
** A short animation that plays when you flip a page, rather than just instantly skipping to the next page.
** Some music (that you can change volume). Maybe 2-3 different songs in different sections of the comic.

* A button to jump straight back to the start
* Change the title from "Read the Comic" to just "Comic", preferably in brackets
* Some voices / dubs if possible.

Hope that helps.
-frog-

EDIT: Do note there's a difference between something being barebones and being minimalistic.