I played this a few days ago, but haven't had the time to write out a review until now (had to make a new account since I haven't been on newgrounds for a few years). I absolutely love the story and characters so far. As someone who enjoys writing stories as well, I appreciate the depth that the character's personalities have. For your first game, you've done a phenomenal job! I can't wait to see what happens next. Definitely one of the better visual novels that I have played.
Keep up the great work and congrats on 1k Fans!