Compelling work, I'm excited to see more!
A 20/20 film for 2020.
A young girl and an older boy embodies their own weaknesses. One will have to pay the price. Intended for people who are 13 years and over.
This took me 800 to 900 hours in 5 1/2 months of work to create this 4 minute film. Honestly, I'm very proud that I was able to let out my vision!
Stay tuned, this is only the beginning! :)
Also, please critique me!
Main Artist - Piano Peace
Composer - Philip Hancock
Title - Goodbye Music
Composer - Fred McKinnon
Titles - Warmth of Light | Piano Instrumental [Episode 176, September 6, 2019]
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Pause to Pray | Piano Instrumental [Episode 178, September 19, 2019]
Casts
Light - Marawrs
Daniel - Pavle Vasiljevic
Clara & Mother - DarkNightPrincess
Compelling work, I'm excited to see more!
That is a lot of hours, great work.
This was a very pleasant surprise. Something really interesting.
Let's start with the animation. Very, very nice. Pleasant style, not too simple but still polished. Really fluid movement. The shots are pretty damn nice and the movement inside the frame shows depth in a very visually pleasing way, it's satisfying and dynamic. Movement has weight, too. Really great job on that. One thing I'll remark on is that some of the faces look a bit too much like legos, so a bit silly at serious moments, like when he clicks the lighter on. That and the way he was holding it was weird and silly, right up to his face with his arm positioned in level with his shoulders.
The sound was pretty good. Nice sound effects and music and I think the voice acting was pretty good, though I'm not generally a bit fan of grunts and gasps and stuff.
The story was certainly interesting, I like that it did take a pretty dark turn, but some things in the execution bother me. First off, it's just really, almost unbelievably, bad of the character to do that to the poor girl. Second, I don't understand what caused him to have the vision... dream... thing. He realized the girl had a mom? That they lived in the woods? They were Christians? I mean, he already knew she was blind. Unless it was somehow God that showed him that, I don't see shy it would hapen as he showed no signs of remorse prior to that. Secondly, that vision was too short to really have any impact and I don't understand what happened. When he took off his willful blindfold, he realized how blind he truly was? It could have been shown way more clearly than that. Also, why does the blindfold disappear in one shot only to appear in the next? He wasn't even shown sleeping before that. All the editing during that part is so weird, with the jump to the jarring shot of him impaling her. It's all so weird and comes out of nowhere. It feels like you wanted to put it in, but didn't know how. The thing with his girlfriend is the same story. One shot she's there, the next she's not and it's all so confusing.
Overall impressive from a visual standpoint, but the story and editing is so weird for half of it that it just leaves you confused. Keep it up, though, I'd love to see more from you!
Thanks for the feedback! I'd say was a little too ambitious. :)
Overall, I'd really like to try again.
Id say my mistake was that I only spend like 11 days on story board and that was it. Also this is my first time creating anything with actual story in it.
There was some wonderful movement in the animtion, great work.