Ah man this is totally the type of game I used to be obsessed with.
Trailer for Alien Squatter | 不法占拠宇宙人
STEAM:
https://store.steampowered.com/app/1131750/Alien_Squatter/
Alien Squatter | 不法占拠宇宙人 OST:
https://bagofdragonite.bandcamp.com/album/alien-squatter-ost-ost
Ah man this is totally the type of game I used to be obsessed with.
Used to? Haha.
The gameplay seems interesting, and the music is good, but the text between gameplay grinds the pace to a halt as it waits for the audience to read a wall of text. The text portion isn't very interesting to look at either, its not very dynamic. The game relies on reading, but the premise is kinda neat. Are there no cutscenes? No promotional artwork or concept art? No words from the creators themselves?
Put some animation into the text, help it match the rhythm of the great music you have here. Add transitions, and this trailer will do better because the game DOES look appealing. The music is fine. This can generate hype for the game if done correctly.
Thanks for the advice. I think you're right about having the text be more dynamic in some way. It's on its way to release but that could be implemented as an update potentially.
The game doesn't have much for cutscenes, just cut-screens. We didn't want to give too much away so didn't show much of that in the trailer. I didn't do any concept/promo art as I drew everything off the top of my head. I might do some promo art when we get to the marketing of the game though.
You're right that it would be good to have some words from myself and partner. I haven't seen too many trailers on steam do that but the one's that did felt more engaging that's for sure. Since we have a fanbase from our earlier game it didn't come to mind.
I can't apologize for the text though. That's what our original game was famous for. I didn't have the proper time to put in to the art of Void Pyramid at the time but even though the game lacked on the graphics end of things the story, lore and comedy captured within the walls of the text is what built our initial fanbase. It wouldn't be right to break our fans expectations.
I'm glad you like the music too! I put a lot of time into making tracks that fit each area perfectly. The album can be listened to here: https://bagofdragonite.bandcamp.com/album/alien-squatter-ost-ost
I appreciate all this good advice and will see what I can do in later updates!