Looks like it could be clever, but while I can't understand what's being said the main character's voice is unchanging and leads the audience to believe he is bored. Is that the desired effect? With no vocal highs, lows or change that is my takeaway. Could help if the voice was a kind of comedy-monotone-on-purpose or a character voice.
Simple line drawings are effective here.
You might consider subtitles to enlarge your audience.